I am walking, the cold asphalt beneath my shoes echoing with the drumming of thousands of feet. I pause to watch the cars going by, traversing the gaps between the white and yellow lines.
Across the road I see a boy, with hair of sandy blonde. I know him well and the girl with whom he walks, his sister, escorting her home from school.
I raise one arm, as if to wave, then rethink and lower it once more. He glances across at me, as if my slight movement had caught his attention.
I smile, thinking that he sees me, yet I am disappointed. His grey–blue eyes stare through the place I stand.
Looking, yet not seeing.
Knowing, yet not caring.
He and his sister walk on, vanishing among the city's crowds. My thoughts are haunted by his eyes, staring through me, not noticing my presence, not caring that I walked this way, off my usual path, merely to catch a glimpse of his face.
This is really good! You capture the despair of the speaker and do it so poetically that my throat tightens with his/her grief.
ReplyDeleteOf course I can capture my own grief. Also I was just reminded (Thanks, Emi) that he has brown eyes, not blue! WWWaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhh!
ReplyDeleteWow! You did a great job capturing your grief. J.T.S. is such a Josh. Perfect!
ReplyDelete...that I could post under her name. I like the way you built up this whole dance of communication/miscommunication that leaves the reader wondering if "he" really noticed you or not. Maybe he was going through all the same uncertainty in his own mind.
ReplyDeleteNo, he wasn't, Mom. I should know. By the way, you should all see my newest post!
ReplyDeleteKaliana, it is J.S.T. He is a Josh, isn't he? Sigh...
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